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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the purposes of
water
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use
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 in six areas of the world.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that using
water
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 for agricultural
use
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 was the main purpose in
Asia
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, Africa and South
America
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,
while
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 North
America
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 and Europe used
water
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 for industrial
use
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. Looking at the details, the largest proportion of people in Central
Asia
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 used
water
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 for agriculture, with 88%. The percentage of
water
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 used for agronomy in Africa was much higher than
Southeast
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in Southeast
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Asia
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, with 84% and 81 respectively. 71% of
water
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 is used for agronomy in South
America
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. In the case of the proportion of
water
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 used for industry in Europe and North
America
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 was the highest, with 53% and 48%, in that order.
By contrast
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, in other contents, the percentage of
water
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 used for it was much smaller, from 12% to 5%. As for domestic
use
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,
water
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 usage was the smallest. In
America
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 and Europe, the percentage of
water
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 used for it was greatest, with around 19% and 13%
while
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 Africa and
Asia
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 were the lowest, with 9% and 7%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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