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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were abale to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were abale to speak other languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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