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The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK, 2000-2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK, 2000-2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the information about the rate of three employment sectors (public, private, self-employed) in the United
kingdom
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 from 2000 to 2010.
Overall
, the
trend
 of
private
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the private
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sector
was
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declined
while
 both
public
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the public
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 and
self- employed
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self-employed
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 sectors
were
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fluccuated
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fluctuated
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 but had
upward
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an upward
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trend
 and
end
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ended
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 up
higher
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a higher
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 position
at the end
. Considering
private
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the private
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sector
, the
trend
was
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gradually declined it
is
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was
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lowest
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 in 2010 which was 20. The
changes
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 over 10 years was nearly 40.
In contrast
, the
trend
 for
public
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the public
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sector
,
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apply
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 rose from 40 to just above 50 between 2003 and 2010.
However
, it is evident that there was a slight decline
of
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in
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 the public
sected
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sector
 from 2005 to 2006 but it did not
reached
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 it is lowest. A gradual increase
of
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in
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 employment can be
itentified
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identified
 in
self-employed
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the self-employed
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sector
 between 2000 and 2002 but it declined in
next
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the next
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 year to its lowest position which was nearly 17
then
 gradually inclined
its
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 maximum point which was 30 in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, sector with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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  • employment rates
  • economy
  • sectors
  • agriculture
  • manufacturing
  • services
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • economic policies
  • technological advancements
  • global market demands
  • patterns
  • decade
  • significant changes
  • abrupt changes
  • stability
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