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The table above show sales of fair trade coffe and banans in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004.

The table above show sales of fair trade coffe and banans in five countries in Europe in 1999 and 2004.
The table provides data about how much banana and
coffess
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coffees
coffee
sold
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 in five various countries over the
period
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 5 years from 1999 and 2004. Units are measured in
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million
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millions
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 of
euros
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 sales of coffee indicated an increase in all countries
thoughout
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throughout
 the year,
whereas
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product
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products
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 of
banan
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bananas
 in Switzerland and Denmark except 2 places experienced the highest number of sales
at the
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end
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.
Furthermore
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, both coffee and
banans
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bananas
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 trade in
UK
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the UK
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 witnessed high
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million
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millions
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 of
euros
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 at the
begin
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and
at the
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end
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 of the
period
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. In detail, in the initial year
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the Uk's
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Uk's
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UK's
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 figure stood at 1.5
million
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of
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euros
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, before an increase
by
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of
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 5
euros
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at the
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end
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 . Looking at the Switzerland and Denmark's trend
of
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was about 3 and 1.8
million
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of
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euros
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 respectively. In 2004, both
country's
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countries'
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trens
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trends
 in coffee sales
demonstated
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demonstrated
a dramatic
an
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increase to 6 and 2 respectively.
In contrast
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, Belgium and Sweden's proportion accounted for nearly 1
million
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of
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euros
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 before a rise
with
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 1.7 and 1 respectively a the
end
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 of the
period
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. When it comes
,
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to, trades
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the trades
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trades
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trade
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 of
bananas product
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banana products
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 in Switzerland
owned
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was
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 1
euroa
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euro
 in 1999, but in the following
period
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 was
climed
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climbed
claimed
with
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to
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 5.5
million
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of
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euro
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euros
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. Meanwhile, Denmark stood at 0.6 before rapid a rise
by
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 nearly 3
million
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. Both
remain
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 countries Belgium and Sweden
was
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were
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 seen
1
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and 0.9 respectively after a
decrese
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decrease
 to 1.8 and 2 in 1999. Interestingly,
Uk
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UK
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 trade in
banans
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bananas
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 increased from 1.5
million
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of
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euros
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 in 1999 to 45
million
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of
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euros
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 in 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, million, euros, end with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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