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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided six pie charts illustrate the data about three ways of
the
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water
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 usage (industrial, agriculture, domestic) in six
diffrent
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different
 countries.
Overall
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, four countries except North
America
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 and
Europe
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, heavily use
water
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 for agriculture,
while
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 both North
America
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 and
Europe
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 use
for
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it for
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 industrial operations. When considering
water
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 consumption for agriculture, the highest
propotions
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proportions
proportion
 of
consumer
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consumers
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 is Central
Asia
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 which is 88%.
In contrast
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, the least user is
Europe
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 which is 32%. Both Africa and Central
Asia
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 consume nearly
same
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the same
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 amount of
water
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 for industry (7%, 5% respectively).
However
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, In
Europe
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, the major
percentages
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percentage
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 of
water
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 usage for industrial works
which
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is 53%
while
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 the consumption
of
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in
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 North
America
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 is 48%. South
America
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is
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has
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 the highest
user
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use
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 of
water
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 for domestic
purpose
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purposes
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 which is 19% and both Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 use only 7% which is
lowest
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the lowest
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 among other cities.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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