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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004.

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The
two
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 line charts illustrate data about the goods imported from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 into New Zealand from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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,
imports
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 from the
two
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countries
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 into New Zealand changed constantly during the given period.
Initially
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, the Australian
imports
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 were higher than the
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Japan
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Japanese
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imports
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.
However
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, Japanese
imports
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 had a significant
increase
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 during the
time-span
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. Both
countries
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 experienced fluctuations, ending with drastic results, causing
Japan
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 to dramatically dip,
while
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Australia
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 had a significant peak. Comparing the data first presented in the line chart, there is a narrow difference between the money
spend
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 by New Zealand on
imports
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 from the presented
countries
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, with
Australia
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 presenting
a
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an
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increase
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 of 1000
million
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NZ
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dollars
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 more than
Japan
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.
Among
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 the years 1995-1997, both
countries
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 presented an
increase
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, reaching just over 6000
million
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NZ
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dollars
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, with
Japan
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's
ammount
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amount
 reaching the highest peak it will experience throughout
this
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 time period. The biggest difference between the
two
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countries
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is
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was
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 experienced in 2004,
where
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when
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Australia
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has
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had
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 a 4000
million
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NZ
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dollars
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increase
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 since
it's
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its
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 starting point, and
Japan
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has
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had
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 a 1000
million
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NZ
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dollars
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 decrease compared to the first data presented.
This
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 creates the widest gap between the
two
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, which is
of
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6000
million
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dollars
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, being a great difference from the initial gap of only 1000
million
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, australia, japan, imports, countries, increase, million, nz, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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