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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line
graoh
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graph
 provides information about the cost spent on
books
 in Germany , France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, the money spent on
books
 significantly increased across
three
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the three
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 countries and Germany had the highest cost
on
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books
 over 10 years ,starting with 80
million
dollars
 and ending with 95
million
dollars
 ,
althogh
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although
 people in Austria
spends
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spent
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 the lowest amount of money on
books
but
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it replaced by Italian people in 2003 and reached to 63
million
dollars
 in2005 . In Austria, the cost
on
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of
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books
gradual
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gradually
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 rose from 30
million
dollars
 in 1995 to 72
million
dollars
 by 2005
although
, it has a steady trend over 6 years between 1995 to 2001.
Also
,the people in Germany spent 80
million
dollars
 on
books
 and it had
increase
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increased
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 to 90
million
dollars
 in 1999 and
then
 reached
to
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99
million
dollars
 in 2005. In
italy
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Italy
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,The expenditure on
books
was
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increased from 50
million
dollars
 in 1995 to 61
million
dollars
 by 2005 .
Moreover
,It went down from 55
million
dollars
 in 1997 to 49
million
dollars
 in 1999.
in
contrast
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 the amount of money spent on
book
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books
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 dramatically jumped and reached
closely
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close
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 to 76
million
dollars
.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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