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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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graph
 provides information about the cost spent on
books
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 in Germany , France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
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, the money spent on
books
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 significantly increased across
three
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the three
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 countries and Germany had the highest cost
on
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of
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books
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 over 10 years ,starting with 80
million
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dollars
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 and ending with 95
million
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dollars
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althogh
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although
 people in Austria
spends
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spent
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 the lowest amount of money on
books
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but
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apply
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it replaced by Italian people in 2003 and reached to 63
million
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dollars
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 in2005 . In Austria, the cost
on
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of
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books
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gradual
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 rose from 30
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 to 72
million
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dollars
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 by 2005
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, it has a steady trend over 6 years between 1995 to 2001.
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,the people in Germany spent 80
million
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dollars
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 on
books
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 and it had
increase
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 to 90
million
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dollars
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 in 1999 and
then
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 reached
to
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99
million
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dollars
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 in 2005. In
italy
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Italy
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,The expenditure on
books
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was
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increased from 50
million
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dollars
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 in 1995 to 61
million
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dollars
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 by 2005 .
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,It went down from 55
million
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dollars
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 in 1997 to 49
million
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dollars
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 in 1999.
in
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contrast
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 the amount of money spent on
book
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books
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 dramatically jumped and reached
closely
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close
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 to 76
million
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dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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