The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided bar chart and two pie charts illustrate the data about the percentages of

males

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and

females

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who

arrested

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were arrested

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the UK

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due to

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for

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six kind of reasons from 2015 to 2020.

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, the majority of

males

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and

females

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were not arrested even having reasons to do so. In

comparitively

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comparison

, more

males

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were arrested because of drinking driving, breaking and entering, theft

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and

other cases

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more people got arrested

due to

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public intoxication and

assult

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assault

. The highest proportions of

females

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were arrested for public intoxication which was nearly 40%,

while

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males

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represent nearly 30% of

this

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offence.

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higher

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a higher

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male percentage got arrested for drinking

driving

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and driving

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which was about 20% but

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the females

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females

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female

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rate was just around 15%. Both breaking and entering, theft have significant female involvement which

indicate

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indicates

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the

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apply

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rate

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rates

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nearly

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of nearly

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18% and 15% respectively. In

comparision

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comparison

, the main offence was public intoxication for both genders

while

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least

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the least

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concern was theft. Both had relatively

same

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the same

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percentages for arresting other reasons.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

162 words

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