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The pie chart shows the percentage of males and females arrested in the UK from 2015- 2020 and the bar chart shows the reasons for these people's arrest. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided bar chart and two pie charts illustrate the data about the percentages of
males
 and
females
 who
arrested
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were arrested
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 in
UK
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the UK
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due to
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for
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 six kind of reasons from 2015 to 2020.
Overall
, the majority of
males
 and
females
 were not arrested even having reasons to do so. In
comparitively
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comparison
, more
males
 were arrested because of drinking driving, breaking and entering, theft
anf
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and
 other cases
while
 more people got arrested
due to
 public intoxication and
assult
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assault
. The highest proportions of
females
 were arrested for public intoxication which was nearly 40%,
while
males
 represent nearly 30% of
this
 offence.
In contrast
,
higher
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a higher
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 male percentage got arrested for drinking
driving
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and driving
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 which was about 20% but
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the females
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females
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female
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 rate was just around 15%. Both breaking and entering, theft have significant female involvement which
indicate
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indicates
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the
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apply
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rate
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rates
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nearly
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of nearly
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 18% and 15% respectively. In
comparision
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comparison
, the main offence was public intoxication for both genders
while
least
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the least
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 concern was theft. Both had relatively
same
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the same
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 percentages for arresting other reasons.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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