The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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These two diagrams regard the
cement
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-making process and the concrete production using
cement
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for building purposes. As you can observe, in the
cement
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production’s
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production
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diagram, there are
few
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a few
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steps that permit to
collect
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collection
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cement
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of cement
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in many bags. First of all, limestone and clay have to be
positionated
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positioned
in a crusher which permits
to get
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apply
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the powder.
This
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powder has to pass between a mixer and a rotating heater.
Then
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, the result has to be
grinded
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ground
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to get the final product, the
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.
At the end
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of
this
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process, the amount of
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has to be put in many bags for collecting and
trasporting
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transporting
.
Regarding the
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concrete production,
it
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apply
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is a mix of many products that are necessary to be put in a concrete mixer.
For getting
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the final result, the products’ quantities have to be very accurate. There must be 15% of
cement
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, 25% of sand, 10% of water and 50% of gravel.
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