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The table provides comparison of the expenditure rate of the government on education amd training and participation rate of 18-24 years olds in the same in five nations in 2002.

The table provides comparison of the expenditure rate of the government on education amd training and participation rate of 18-24 years olds in the same in five nations in 2002.
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 table compares the educational attainment and participation rates of 18-
24 year olds
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24-year-olds
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 in 2002 in every fifth
country
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general
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general,
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 it can be seen that five countries were at
variety
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a variety
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 of rates
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,
Poland
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 had the lowest
expedenture
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expenditure
rate
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 Slovenia had the highest
Poland
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 had the highest participation among others and Romania had the lowest
rate
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. Slovenia was the highest
country
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 on
expedenture
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expenditure
rate
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 at 25
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percent
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per cent
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 and the lowest one was
Czech
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 Republic at just 9
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percent
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per cent
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. Hungary and Romania countries were similar at 13% and 10 % respectively.
Poland
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 was just 5
percent
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. Regarding to
rate
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 of participation the lowest
country
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 was Romania at 23%. The biggest
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percent
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per cent
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country
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 was
Poland
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 at 44%.Czech Republic at 27
percent
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.
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contrast
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 the
last
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 one was Hungary at 34
percent
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, poland, rate, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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