The bar chart shows the percentages of the Canadian workforce in five major industries in 1850 and 2020

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This

chart demonstrates the proportion of participation of the Canadian

workforce

in five big industries in 1850 and 2020. There is a significant gap regarding the services industry in these years. In 1850, the services

sector

had 33% of the

workforce

share. But throughout

this

period, the amount in

this

sector

increased significantly and rose to 81%.

In contrast

to services, manufacturing saw a decline in percentage by 2020. It lost 25% of

workforce

participation and dropped to

last

place. Agriculture/Fishing decreased

similarly

to manufacturing, falling by 1%.

Also

, energy/water had 1%, but

this

sector

lost only 2%, making it the least affected

sector

On the other hand

, the construction

sector

experienced growth, increasing by 8%.

Initially

, there were three big industries that kept the main proportion of the

workforce

. In 2020,

this

role shifted, and other sectors gained a larger share.

For instance

, in 1850, construction was in fourth place;

however

this

industry rose to third place.

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