The given below pie chart shows the cultural and leisure Activities amongst boys’ and girls’. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.write at least 150 words.

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The two given pie charts compare the participation of

boys

and

girls

in some chosen

activites

Correct your spelling

activities

This

data is based on

percentage

Fix the agreement mistake

percentages

show examples

Overall

It is clear that

how

girls

are far

much

Rephrase

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fascinated by reading and dancing than

boys

while

boys

are less interested

Correct pronoun usage

in it

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. Indeed, they are really into

comuter

Correct your spelling

computer

games.

According to

pie

Correct article usage

the pie

show examples

charts, Both groups

are

Unnecessary verb

apply

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participated in listening to music in the same amount which is 10 per

cent

. Regarding sports,

boys

join

Wrong verb form

joined

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in basketball, skateboarding, and soccer which

are

Change the verb form

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26, 17,

Correct word choice

and 11

show examples

per

cent

respectively,

girls

on the other hand

, are joined in

gemnastics

Correct your spelling

gymnastics

and netball more than other activities, the share of

former

Correct article usage

the former

show examples

is 11 per

cent

, and the latter is 15 per

cent

. Dancing is the most popular activity among

grils

Correct your spelling

girls

Change preposition

apply

show examples

27%,

while

the contribution of

boys

is none. Regarding reading,

Although

girls

are interested in reading to 21%, only 2% of

boys

choose

this

activity.

However

, they are more fascinated by computer

game

Fix the agreement mistake

games

show examples

to 34 per

cent

, which is 16 per

cent

that of

girls

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words boys, girls, cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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8
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

173 words

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