The line graph shows value changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000, while the second line chart shows employment status in the same industry.

The line graph shows value changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000, while the second line chart shows employment status in the same industry.
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two line graphs illustrate the
value
changes in the
steel
industry
of the UK between 1970 and 2000, and the employment status of the same
industry
.
Overall
, the
production
and demand for
steel
decreased and the import of
steel
increased. The employment status of the
steel
industry
experienced a
decrease
. In the first line graph, the total demand for
steel
was 2000000 in the
year
1970, and after that, it experienced a
decrease
throughout the period. In the
year
1990, the demand for
steel
experienced a gradual
decrease
and reached around 11000000. Meanwhile, in 1970, the
production
value
of
steel
was around 17000000. After that, the
production
value
encountered a sharp
decrease
, and in 1990, the
production
value
was around 9000000.
However
, the import
value
of
steel
was around 1000 in the
year
in the
year
1970, and it increased by up to 4000000 in the
year
1980. The import reached 8000000 in 2000. In the second line graph, in the
year
1970, the employment status of the
steel
industry
was around 50000, and it showed a gradual
decrease
throughout the period. In the
year
1990, it reached around 20000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, steel, industry, production, decrease, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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