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The line graph shows value changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000, while the second line chart shows employment status in the same industry.

The line graph shows value changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000, while the second line chart shows employment status in the same industry.
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two line graphs illustrate the
value
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 changes in the
steel
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industry
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 of the UK between 1970 and 2000, and the employment status of the same
industry
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.
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, the
production
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 and demand for
steel
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 decreased and the import of
steel
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 increased. The employment status of the
steel
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industry
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 experienced a
decrease
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. In the first line graph, the total demand for
steel
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 was 2000000 in the
year
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 1970, and after that, it experienced a
decrease
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 throughout the period. In the
year
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 1990, the demand for
steel
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 experienced a gradual
decrease
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 and reached around 11000000. Meanwhile, in 1970, the
production
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value
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 of
steel
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 was around 17000000. After that, the
production
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value
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 encountered a sharp
decrease
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, and in 1990, the
production
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value
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 was around 9000000.
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, the import
value
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 of
steel
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 was around 1000 in the
year
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 in the
year
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 1970, and it increased by up to 4000000 in the
year
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 1980. The import reached 8000000 in 2000. In the second line graph, in the
year
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 1970, the employment status of the
steel
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industry
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 was around 50000, and it showed a gradual
decrease
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 throughout the period. In the
year
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 1990, it reached around 20000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, steel, industry, production, decrease, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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