The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph provided above gives information about ten
countries
with the highest amount of
production
and
consumption
of
rice
in 2020.
To begin
with,
generally
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the cultivation of all
countries
were
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slightly more than their
consumptoins
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consumption
consumptions
, except for two
countries
;
Germany
and Russia. In the case of
Germany
, they used nearly 50
billion
kWh
more
rice
, its
consumption
was 582.5
billion
kWh
.
In addition
,
although
Russian
production
was equal to its
consumption
, nearly 1050
billion
kWh
, Compared to
Germany
, its
production
and
consumption
was double. By eliminating
Germany
, the four
countries
at the end
of the list, Korea, Rep., Brazil, France, and Canada, had
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production
osscilating
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oscillating
around 500 to 600
billions
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kWh
, and their consumptions varied between 450 to 550. Turning our attention to the
countreis
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countries
with the highest amount of output and
consumtion
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consumption
; China was the first country with the most significant
production
; 5398
billion
kWh
. And its
consumption
was almost 50kWh less than that of output. Followed by
United
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States,
This
countrie
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country
countries
had the second position
in
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the list. In comparison to China, Americans ate remarkably less
rice
, with 4100
billion
kWh
production
and 3866
billion
kWh
consumption
. Japan and India stood after Russia, with
production
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the production
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of 936 for Japan and 871 for India, people ate 856
kWh
and 698
kWh
rice
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in those
countries
respectively.
Overall
, China and
United
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the United
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States were the biggest producers of
rice
, and they were the greatest consumers.
Furthurmore
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Furthermore
, in
Germany
and France,
consumption
was more than cultivation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, production, consumption, rice, germany, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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