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The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the UK, the rest of Europe and Japan from 1993 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph compares the proportion of workers facing joblessness in the UK, the EU, and Japan from 1993 to 2007.
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, despite consistently obtaining the lowest unemployment
rate
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, Japan was
also
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 the sole nation to experience an increase
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at
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 the end.
Conversely
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, the rates in the UK and the EU generally declined, with a lower proportion in the level of the EU. In 1993, only 2% of Japan's workforce was unemployed.
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 rose to 3% in 1995 and remained steady until 1999. (*) A sharp increase to 6% occurred by 2003, making it surpass the UK’s
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 in 2001, at over 5%.
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, by 2007, Japan’s unemployment
rate
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 fell to 4%.
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, the UK had the highest initial
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 at 11%, which dropped steadily to 5% by 2005 before a slight rise in the final two years. The EU’s
rate
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 was 10% in 1993,
after
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and after
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 exceeding the UK’s level in 1995, it reached
the
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peaked
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at
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of
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 12% in 1997. Onwards,
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 area’s data followed a gradual decline, and
finally
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reaching
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 8% by 2007.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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