Band 7+: The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for Band 7+: The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart provides information about the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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according to

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the graph, most females in all age groups are more active than males, except in the 15-24 class.

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, women in the 45 to 54 club had the highest proportion, and males in the 35 to 44 class had the lowest proportion.

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, men had a fluctuating number, it experienced downward from teenager to adulthood in middle 40. It started from above 50% but tended to decrease under 40% in the maturity group.

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, the total of above 45 age increased to about 47% in the 65 and over cluster.

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, females had the opposite trend compared to males. The total of females who liked doing physical activities improved from adolescent to mature life at 54.

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, the percentage decreased nearly the same with men in the 65 and over group. The people in the elderly, both male and female did not like doing exercise or other regular physical activities.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

179 words

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