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The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts beloow show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak othe languages in addition to English, in 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart
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illustrates
 the number of British students at one university in England who were able to speak foreign
languages
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 English, in 2000 and 2010. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
, it can be seen that British students who can use Spanish had the highest in both years. Looking first at the percentage of students able to speak only Spanish, French, and German. Spanish was the highest
speakers
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 at 35% in 2010, which was higher than in 2000. At the same time, the figure for French in 2010 was lower than those in 2010.
In contrast
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Student
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 only German
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 communicate in 2000 were
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 the same as
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in 2010. Moving on to the proportion of learners that can speak two other
languages
,
another
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languages
, and no other language. In 2000, the figure for
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 who can use
another
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other languages
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languages
 began at 15% and
then
 there was a minimal increase in
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other
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 to 20% in 2010.
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 speakers can speak only English and two other
languages
 in 2000 were the same as those in 2010.
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