the figure shows demographic trends in scotland. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

the figure shows demographic trends in scotland.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The charts illustrate the proportion of population trends in Scotland in three different stages from 1940 to 2020.
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,the ratio of birth and population growth is considered
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a decreasing but it is vice versa for mortality. The ratio of fertility had so many
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and rises past these years but
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it dipped through these years and in 2020 the proportion of
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is about 0.5% which is about a 2% difference.we can
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similar trend in population growth too,it starts from almost 0.8.5 in 1940 but in 2004
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percentage showed about 0%.
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, there was a significant growth from the years of 1945 to 1950.On the other side, the mortality ratio started nearly at 1.5% and the
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process was downward but in two decades from 1990 to 2010 the rate remained the same and after that, until 2020 it climbed greatly.
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, it will be likely to rise minimally from 2020 to now.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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