In the future people may no longer be able to pay for the things the shop using cash all the payments may have to be made by card or using phone do you think this will happen one day? why do you think some people might not be happy to give up cash?

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In the future, it is possible that men and women not be able to pay for the stuff
the
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shop using cash, all the
payments
may have to be made by
card
or using
mobile
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a mobile
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phone. I personally believe by improving technology methods of paying will be changed which it has already changed and people will
happy
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because of two major reasons. The first reason is that carrying
money
is
difficult
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more difficult
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than carrying only one
card
or a mobile phone.
Then
, people like to carry
less
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fewer
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things with
themselves
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them
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which makes people happy to support methods of
payments
by
card
. The second reason is that carrying only one thing
such
as a
smart phone
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smartphone
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is
more safe
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than carrying a lot of
money
and
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apply
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not only for customers but
also
for
seller
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sellers
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.
For example
, a store keeps
money
to
change
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exchange
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for customers, when
thiefs
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thieves
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go to the store,
he
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they
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can take
money
easily but when customers pay by
card
you don't need to keep
money
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the money
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.
Therefore
it will
safe
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be safe
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for clients and owners.
However
, some old men and women prefer to pay by cash like traditional
payments
.
For instance
, it is difficult for them to use a smartphone or an
apple
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Apple
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watch to pay and
also
they don't know how they can check their account by application.
Therefore
, they prefer to pay by cash to see how much
the
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they
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spent
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and how much they have. In conclusion, improving technology
effects
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affects
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on
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apply
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many things
such
as methods of
payments
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payment
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.
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task achievement
Ensure that all parts of the question are addressed thoroughly, especially addressing why people might not want to give up cash.
task achievement
Use more specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention recent studies or specific technological developments in payment methods.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical flow by connecting ideas more explicitly, using linking words and phrases.
coherence cohesion
Clear introduction and conclusion are present, providing a good framework for the essay.
task achievement
The essay touches on both potential benefits of a cashless society and reasons why some might resist the change.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cashless society
  • digital payments
  • e-wallets
  • technologically adept
  • banking services
  • data privacy
  • security concerns
  • digital transactions
  • underdeveloped areas
  • technology infrastructure
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