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The line graph gives data on the proportion of children respects to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportion of children are categories in four age groups.

The line graph gives data on the proportion of children respects to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportion of children are categories in four age groups.
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The line graph compares the proportion of statistics of
children
 considered to the total juvenile population in the United Kingdom in four different
age
 categories namely;0-4,5-9,10-14 and 15-19 from 1990 to 2001.The items are measured in percentage.
Overall
 ,there are two general trends in the line graph :upward and downward .Between 1990 and 2001 the percentage of
children
 5-9 and 10-14
age
 groups increased ,
while
 the figure for the 0-4 and 15-19
age
 groups decreased dramatically . In 1990 ,the highest figure was in 15-
19 ages old
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19-year-old
children
 well over 25% ;
however
 ,
this
 percentage dropped to 23 % in 1994 before reaching 25% in 2001 .
Moreover
 ,the 0-4
age
 group of
children
 were just below 25% in 1990 and it declined dramatically to just below 24% in 2001 . As can be seen from the line graph the 5-9 years old
children
 increased from 25% approximately in 1990 to just over 25% in 2001.
Children
 in the 10-14
age
 group showed
sharp
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 increase from 23 % in 1990 and reached a peak level
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 over 26% in 2001.
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