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The craft below shows the percentage of female workers and workers is 50 or above in the UK workforce. Summarized information by selecting and reporting the main feature and make comparisons were relevant

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The data in
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 chart demonstrates the portion of households having an assist to
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the internet
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internet
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 in Germany UK and Spain in the year 2007 to 2019.
Overall
, it can be seen clearly that,
Germany
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 households have the highest connection to the
internet
 from 2019
while
on the other hand
 in comparison to all three countries Spain's citizens have less connection to
internet
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.
To begin
, starting from the gate 2007 around 71% of
housefull
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 in Germany have
an
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access to the
internet
 and continuously
increasing
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 throughout the year and reaching
to
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almost 92% in 2019.
In addition
, British
citizen
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com
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 in second place for using
internet
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the internet
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 starting from 60% in the year 2007 and reaching
to
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around 91% in 2019.
Furthermore
, pain
have
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 the highest improvement in
use
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 of
internet
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as
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starting from just around 41% in 2007 and reaching
to
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90% in 2019.
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