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WORK: Most high level positions in companies are filled by men, even though the workforce in many developed countries consists of 50 percent female workers. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percentage of management positions to women. Discuss, what is your opinion?

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In modern times, we see more
women
 in
the
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offices where they are seen as a threat by their male co-workers,
while
 others welcome the idea of
a
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allowing females to be financially
independant
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independent
. Is it a good opportunity for
women
? and are they given the same benefits as men? Despite the cruel and recurrent joke that
women
 should stay in their kitchens, many females have proven
theirselves
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 in their respective fields, and
i
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 can give you countless
exemple
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 of female doctors, engineers and lawyers with amazing careers and
honorable
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 work ethics like Marie Currie or Amal Clooney;
unfortunetly
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unfortunately
 not all of them got the deserved recognition
,
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 or the career boost that their male co-workers got. Many
women
 are refused a job opportunity because they are
a
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single
mother
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, or because the company is
affraid
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afraid
 of
a
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potential maternity leave;
thus
 denying us the opportunity to not only
prouve
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prove
improve
 ourselves in the office
,
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 but
also
 to unleash our work abilities and capabilities. I believe it is
unfaire
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unfair
, to judge someone's ability to accomplish a task based on their gender, and that females should be
seeing
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 as humans with hard-earned degrees and experience
first,
not as only mothers or sisters or wives who will slow down your
companies
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 growth.
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