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A job for life is no longer a reality. Many people are now employed on short-term contracts. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this kind of employment for employees?

#job #life #reality #people #contracts #employment #employees
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As our life expectancy prolonged and new jobs came up to the surface
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 industrial revolution, employees now don't contract with companies on long-term. Now we are going to find out in
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 and cons
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this
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 type of employment.
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we are going to focus on
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. Having a short-term experience in a company gives you various experiences
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 many fields.
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 will make you
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challengeous
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challenging
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society and the company.
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, you can grow your leadership
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 meeting a lot of people
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conflict and
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harmony which can improve your work efficiency.
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 topic are cons of short
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 of contracts. As I said, short-term experiences are equal to various
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experiences
, but you can't have relationships or experiences in depth. Even if you worked in a lot of companies,
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understandings
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about
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 your job will make your knowledge useless.
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, if you are
introverted
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 person,
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 kind of employment will
inturrupt
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interrupt
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