The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pictures illustrates the
process
and equipment used in the
cement
-making
process
and how is it made
cement
with produce concrete for building purposes
Overall
,we can see two scheme which is used to various produce for receipt
cement
and concrete.First of all for production
cement
the
process
consist of 10 stages.Beginning with crushing limestone and clay and ending up with receiving bags of
cement
.
Secondly
to obtain concrete,certain materials are required
such
as:
cement
(15%),water(10%),sand(25%),gravel(50%) and concrete mixer.
Firstly
,limestone and clay are passed through crusher,resulting in a fine powder.Next
this
powder is mixering and heated .Rotating heater assists on
this
process
.With helping grinder we have
cement
which is put into bags and ready for use In the next stage for production concrete we put 15% of
cement
together with
10% of water and 25% of sand
following
this
we put with small stones 50% of gravel.Subsequentlymixering all produce we have concrete.
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