The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the stages and

equipment used in the cement making process,

and how cement is used to produce concrete for

building purposes.

Summarise the information by selecting and

reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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diagram
shows the
process
of producing
Cement
and Concrete, it uses visual information (drawings and arrows) and
also
show
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the ingredients and tools used in the
process
.
Cement
production is fairly simple, it starts off with a mix of limestone and clay which get crushed into powders
,
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after the powders go through a mixer to become one humongous powder, the powder goes through a
process
of heating and rotating through a
pipe shaped
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tool called a Rotating heater, and
then
it gets cooled down and crushed again using a simple grinder, and in the
end
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it gets bagged in paper or plastic bags. Concrete production is a cold
process
, Which means no heat is used as shown. Concrete is just a mixture of a
half part
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gravel (small stones), a
quarter part
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sand, and a
quarter part
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quarter-part
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mixture made out of
cement
and water, these ingredients go through a concrete mixer to make the final
cement
mixture.
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