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The supplied line graph displays average carbon dioxide discharges per individual UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. Overall, while CO2 emissions in the United Kingdom and Sweden experienced a decline, emissions in Italy and Portugal displayed significant growth. Among the four countries,the United Kingdom consistently had the highest emissions througout the period, while Portugal had the lowest emissions initially however saw the substantial increases over time. In 1967 CO2 emissions in metric tones of the in Italy and Portugal witnessed with a steady annual rise, while United Kingdom initially had was a peak, around 11 CO2 emissions in metric tones throughout the entire period. However, CO2 emissions in Unites Kingdom fell gradually from 1967 to 2007. At this level Swedon soared in 1967 before experiencing with dipped to 2007. Meanwhile CO2 emissions in metric tones of the Italy, Portugal witnessed with upward trend. The amount of CO2 emissions surged between 1967 and 1977 with CO2 emissions approximately 1 and 4 respectively. In 1977, there was a steadily steady increase.

The supplied line graph displays average carbon dioxide discharges per individual UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. Overall, while CO2 emissions in the United Kingdom and Sweden experienced a decline, emissions in Italy and Portugal displayed significant growth. Among the four countries,the United Kingdom consistently had the highest emissions througout the period, while Portugal had the lowest emissions initially however saw the substantial increases over time. In 1967 CO2 emissions in metric tones of the in Italy and Portugal witnessed with a steady annual rise, while United Kingdom initially had was a peak, around 11 CO2 emissions in metric tones throughout the entire period. However, CO2 emissions in Unites Kingdom fell gradually from 1967 to 2007. At this level Swedon soared in 1967 before experiencing with dipped to 2007. Meanwhile CO2 emissions in metric tones of the Italy, Portugal witnessed with upward trend. The amount of CO2 emissions surged between 1967 and 1977 with CO2 emissions approximately 1 and 4 respectively. In 1977, there was a steadily steady increase.
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The supplied line graph displays
average
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 carbon dioxide discharges per individual UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007.
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emissions
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 in the United
Kingdom
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 and Sweden experienced a decline,
emissions
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 in Italy and Portugal displayed significant growth. Among the four countries,the United
Kingdom
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 consistently had the highest
emissions
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througout
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throughout
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 Portugal had the lowest
emissions
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initially
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however
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 saw
the
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substantial increases over time. In 1967 CO2
emissions
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 in metric
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of
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the
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in Italy and Portugal witnessed
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a steady annual rise,
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United
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Kingdom
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initially
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a peak, around 11 CO2
emissions
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 in metric
tones
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 throughout the entire period.
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, CO2
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 in
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the Unites
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Unites
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Kingdom
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 fell gradually from 1967 to 2007. At
this
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level
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 Swedon soared in 1967 before experiencing with
dipped
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to
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 2007. Meanwhile CO2
emissions
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 in metric tones of
the
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Italy,
Portugal
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and Portugal
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 witnessed with upward trend. The amount of CO2
emissions
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 surged between 1967 and 1977 with CO2
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approximately
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 1 and 4 respectively. In 1977, there was a steadily steady increase.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words co, emissions, kingdom with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "displays" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "displays" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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