Five months ago, you started renting an apartment on a six-month agreement. You now wish to stay in the apartment for longer than the six months you originally agreed with the owner. Write a letter to the owner of your apartment. In your letter • say how long you now want to rent the apartment for • explain why your plans have changed • tell the owner about a problem in the apartment

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Dear Mr.Patel, I am writing
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letter because I wish to stay away long in your
apartment
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,I am now planning to go abroad for my higher studies and start classes next month. I have been living in an
apartment
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for
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six months
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my classes have been starting for six months.
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I
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want
this
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apartment
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because
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close
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my
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place. My plan was to study in my hometown. But when I saw
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students who went abroad for higher studies.
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,I changed my plan.
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is the best
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apartment
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. But one tiny problem is the bathroom water pipe is leaking. That's why most of the water
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. I hope you understand my problem and you will give
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me permission
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to
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your
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. Yours faithfully, Mr.Shah
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task achievement
Provide more details on how long you want to extend the rental period beyond the initial six months.
coherence cohesion
Ensure clearer expression of ideas. For instance, rearrange sentences to enhance the logical flow of information.
task achievement
The letter has a polite and respectful tone which is appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
The opening and closing of the letter are well-structured and polite.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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