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The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows children by age group as a percentage of the young population in the United Kingdom between 1990 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart depicts the variation of
age
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 group, quantified in percentage, broadly
catergorized
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categorised
 them into four
age
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 intervals,
whicha
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which
 are 0-4, 5-9, 10-14,
15
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and 15
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-19, over the period from 1990 to 2001.
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, there were
substntial
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substantial
 percentage drops in
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age
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the age
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 group of 0-4 and 15-19 from the timeframe of 1990 to 2001,
while
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age
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the age
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bracket
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 of 10-14 and 5-9 witnessed
continued
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a continued
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 increase in the same timeframe. Notably, the proportion of
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age
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 group 15-19 ,
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inititally
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initially
 the highest among them, experienced a
signicificant
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significant
 decline and eventually reached the trough in 1994.
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, the proportion of
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age
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bracket
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 of 10-14 plummeted so
drammatically
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dramatically
 that by the end of the time period. The
age
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bracket
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 of 5-9 and 10-14,
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and 15
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-19 had overtaken and caught up to
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 0-4 in terms of percentage , respectively.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, bracket with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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