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The charts below shows the proportions of British students at one university in England we were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarises information by selecting a reporting domain futures and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below shows the proportions of British students at one university in England we were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarises information by selecting a reporting domain futures and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts
depicts
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 (depict) the percentage points of British
students
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 at one university in England who were competent to speak a different
language
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besides
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 English in 2000 and 2010 years. Generally speaking, it can be seen that the most common
language
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 for both years was Spanish only. The ability to speak
this
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language
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 rose steadily - we can see an upward trend. More specifically, the
number
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 of
students
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 who were able to speak Spanish increased from 30
percent
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 to 35
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. The second most popular current
language
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 in 2000 was French, but compared to 2010 there was a downward trend - percentages dipped from 15 to 10. The third one is German - the
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 of
students
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 who were able to speak
this
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language
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 remained flat -
15
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percent
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in
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between
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 2000 and 2010. The
number
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 of those
students
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 who spoke no other
language
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 except English fell significantly from 20 to 10. There was a twofold decline. All in all, the
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 of
French only
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students
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 plummeted,
while
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 the
number
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 of
German only
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German-only
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students
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leveled
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 off at 10 and
Spanish only
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Spanish-only
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students
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 soared.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, language, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "depicts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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