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The pie chart presents information on proportions of employment sectors of people who graduated Brighton University, collected by the 2019 data.

The pie chart presents information on proportions of employment sectors of people who graduated Brighton University, collected by the 2019 data.
#information #proportions #employment #sectors #people #brighton #university #data
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The aim of
this
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the
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proportions of employment
sectors
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 of people who graduated
Brighton
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from Brighton
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 University, collected by the 2019 data. The given pie
chart
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 shows
sectors
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 and
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
it
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apply
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where
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university
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 graduate
students
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 chose or were employed
by
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. As
it
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can be seen from the
chart
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, service industries are the main area taking up
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one third
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 compared to all other
sectors
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, which can mean that not all
students
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 went where they wanted or had a diploma for it. Moving on, it is shown, that there are 3
sectors
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 which are similar to
one
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 another taking up about ⅙ each
one
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 of
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chart
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the chart
a chart
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 - education, politics & government, manufacturing
industry
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, and most popular
between
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among
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 those
is
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in
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manufacturing
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the manufacturing
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industry
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, but education is just below 1.6 % and politics & government 4.2%.
This
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 data displays that other than
service
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the service
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industry
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students
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 tend to choose
one
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 of the three
sectors
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. Well under all
sectors
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 lays sport with just a 0,1% figure of employment, whichever indicates
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 is the weakest choice of
students
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. Summarizing the given data, it is seen by the pie
chart
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, that in the first place of employment lays
service
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the service
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industry
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,
then
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 education, politics & government, manufacturing
industry
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 and with
least
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the lowest
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 percentage there is sport.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sectors, chart, students, one, industry with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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