4 jan-----------The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

4 jan-----------The charts below show the percentage of workers in three sectors across four countries in 1980 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts depict the variation in the proportion of people employed in the three different sectors across four nations in 1980 and 2010.
Overall
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, The majority of Chinese worked in the agriculture sector,
while
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in the other nations, most workers were employed in the industrial sector in both years. In 1980, the percentage of workers in the industrial field was consistently higher in Germany, the US, and Japan compared to
China
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, accounting for 60% in Germany,
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the US and Japan shared the same rate at 50%.
In contrast
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, in these three countries, communities who were employed in the agriculture area recorded less than 20%,
whereas
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, in
China
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, it was significantly absorbed workforce by 70%. By 2010, the total output of the workforce in the Chinese industrial field remained the same as in 1980,
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otherwise
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this
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rate rose sharply in the three other states.
However
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, the service sector went down in all states, with an average drop of 10% in Germany, the US, and Japan, and a 20% decrease in
China
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.
On the other hand
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, the agricultural workers were relatively stable, but in
China
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, it decreased to 50%, still the largest figure among all countries in agriculture.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words china with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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