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The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Cao Huy)

The table below shows the proportion of women in the labor force and women in management in five countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. (Cao Huy)
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The table compares the rate of
women
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 in two roles in five countries.
Overall
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, the percentage of
women
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 in
labour
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the labour
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 force
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is higer
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higer
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higher
 than in management. Japan is the
countries
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country
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 have the biggest of
woman worker
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women workers
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in
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on
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 the table with 48
percents
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percent
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,
while
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 Egypt
is
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in
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 contrast,
that have
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has
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 the number of
smallest
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apply
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women
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work
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working
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with
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at
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 20 percent. In
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the managemetn
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managemetn
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management
 field, the
country
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countries
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 which have the biggest of
women
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worker
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workers
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is
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are
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 Australia and
United
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the United
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 States with 43 percent,
while
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 Sri Lanka is the country that
have
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has
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 the proportion of
women
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worker
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workers
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 at least.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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