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The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.

The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.
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The line chart shows the
precentages
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percentages
percentage
 of
Australia
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Australian
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 exports compared with India, China,
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the United
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States
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 and Japan between 1990 and 2012.
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, The rates in China experienced an upward trend,
while
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 the proportions
of
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in
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 Japan showed decreased sharply. Both of
United
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the United
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States
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 and India had
a
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apply
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fluctuations
rates
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in rates
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 . The rate of India was around 1% in 1990 but it was
dubled
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doubled
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 three times and it reached
at
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9% in 2010 . After that, it
was
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declined gradually
about
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by about
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 6% in 2012.
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 the China rates increased significantly between 1990 and 2005, it
reaching
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reached
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at
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a
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 peak
by
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of
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 approximately 28% in 2012.
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, the proportion
of
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in
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United
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the United
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States
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 at 12% in 1990 and it fluctuated from 1995 to 2000.
Then
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, it started a swiftly
fell
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fall
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 until 2012. The highest rate
of
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in
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United
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the United
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States
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around
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was around
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 12% in 2000. Japan’s percentage
also
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 had fluctuations. In 1990, the rate of Japan at 26% compared it about
next
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the next
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 year
was
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20% . It
coutinued
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continued
 a sharp decrease until 2005 and it experienced growth was 20%
during
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between
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 2005 and 2010 but it
coutinued
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continued
 a slight decline in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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