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The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.

The given line chart delineates the proportion of Australian exports with four different nations, namely Japan, The US, China and India, from 1990 to 2012.
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The line chart shows the
rate
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 of Australian exports in Japan, United
States
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,
India
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 and
China
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 between 1990 and 2012.
Overall
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, the exporting percentages of Australia showed a steady but significant rise in
China
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 and
India
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 over the period,
while
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 the proportions of exports in Japan and the United
States
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 experienced a downward trend. In 1990 the export reads of
China
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 and
India
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 were nearly 3% and 2% respectively.
China
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's
rate
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 increased sharply throughout the period, exceeding the United
States
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'
rate
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 in 2004 and reaching almost 38%
at the end
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 of the period. In the meantime, the percentage of Australian exports in
India
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 grew by about 2% in 1998 and
then
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 remained steady until 2009. During 2000-2009,
China
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's
rate
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 experienced a rapid surge to more than 10% and continued with a gradual increase to around 39% in 2012. In early 1990 the exporting of Australia
rate
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 of Japan at approximately 37% was the highest among these four countries.
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, it dramatically declined to 20% in 1996.
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, there was a fall of almost 17% in 2003, but the United
States
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' proportion was the lowest in 2011.

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