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Thechartbelowshowsthevalueofonecountry'sexportsinvarious categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisonswhere relevant.

Thechartbelowshowsthevalueofonecountry'sexportsinvarious categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisonswhere relevant.
The bar chart compares
export
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the export
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 earnings of a country in billions of dollars from five different categories in 2015 and 2016,
while
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 the table illustrates the proportion change in relevant groups of exports in 2016
than
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to
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 that of the previous
year
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.
Overall
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, petroleum products and engineered goods occupied the majority worth in exports for
the
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both years. And the value of export earnings increased in 2016 in all categories except for gems and jewellery.
According to
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 the bar chart, the country earned approximately 220 billion dollars from its export trades in 2015
,
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 and showed a slight increase in the next
year
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. In 2015,
the
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apply
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petroleum products
valued
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were valued
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 the highest amount
for
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at
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 over 60,
while
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the
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apply
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engineered goods earned nearly, around 58. Textiles
valued
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were valued
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for
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the least, just about 25.
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, the earning
number
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numbers
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 of these three categories all climbed up in the next
year
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, around 63,62 and 32 respectively. Looking at the table data, most of the groups showed growth in value in the period time, especially textiles, significantly
grew
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growing
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 at 15.24%. Agricultural products only went up by 0.81% compared to the previous
year
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.
However
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, the value of gems and jewellery,
by contrast
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, witnessed a drop,
at
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of
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 5.18%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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