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The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should New Zealand Imports from Australia New Zealand Imports from Japan

The two line graphs below show New Zealand import figures from Australia and Japan in the years 1994 - 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should New Zealand Imports from Australia New Zealand Imports from Japan
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The given line graphs illustrate New Zealand import figures from
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 for a period of 10 years, from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the amount of goods from
Australia
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 was 4000
million
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 and those from
Japan
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was
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 3000
million
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 in 1994.
While
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 the
number
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 of goods from
Australia
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 rose from 4000
million
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 to 8000
million
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, those from
Japan
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 fell, hitting a low of 2000
million
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. Looking at the graph in more detail, the
number
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 of
products
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 from
Australia
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 had significant variations.
This
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 means that the figures
of
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for
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products
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 from
Australia
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 decreased to 3000
million
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 in 1999. Those from
Australia
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 had ups and
down
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downs
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 from 1994 to 2002.
However
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, the
number
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 of
products
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 from
Australia
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 rose significantly, reaching 8000
million
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. Meanwhile, the
number
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 of
products
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 from
Japan
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 had significant fluctuations from 1994 and 2001.
In addition
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, the figures
of
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for
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products
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 from
Japan
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 had a
slightly
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slight
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 descend to 2000.
Therefore
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, the gap between
Australia
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 and
Japan
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 was observed considerable differences in 2004.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 82%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, japan, million, number, products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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