The chart below shows the percentage in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage in the share of international students among university graduates in different Canadian provinces between 2001 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates how many international students graduated from different universities in Canada from 2001 to 2006.
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, what stands out from the graph is that from the all cities studied, there was
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increase in the number of enrollments coming from international students. The
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of New
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Brunswick
, British Columbia and Nova Scotia were the
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. Starting with the higher percentages, New
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Brunswick
dominates the numbers, with around 7% in 2001 and jumping to almost 14% in 2006.
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by Nova Scotia, which
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choice in 2001 with roughly 6% and jumped to around 11% in 2006. In third place is the British Columbia university, with less than 5% in 2006, but increased to approximately 11% in 2006. In the lower percentages, is Ontario, with around 3% in 2001 and climbed to 6% in 2006. Manitoba, Newfoundland and Labrador
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shared the same trend, about 4% in 2001 and grew to about 7% in 2006. The
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of Alberta, almost had 5% of enrollments in 2001,
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, it rose to
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approximately
8% in 2006.
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