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The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top tem countries for the production and consumption of rice in 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the
production
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 and
consumption
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 of
rice
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 in the top ten different countries in 2020.
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,it is readily apparent that
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rice
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consumption
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 had the highest number in all
counries
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countries
,
while
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rice
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production
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 had the largest number in Bangladesh. There was a significant difference in
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Philippines
 for
the
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production
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 and
consumption
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, with the former standing at 410
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tonne
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 and the latter ranking at 387
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tonne
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.
Moreover
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, there was a small difference in India,
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rice
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with rice
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production
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 and
consumption
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 reaching
to
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106 and 104
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tonne
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tonnes
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. In Qatar(94
tonne
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), Tunisia(87
tonne
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) and Pakistan(52
tonne
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)
rice
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production
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 was larger than
consumption
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,
whereas
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 South Korea stood
last
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 for
rice
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production
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 and
consumption
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 with 49
tonne
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 and 45
tonne
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. The
rice
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production
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also
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 ranked higher than the
consumption
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 in Vietnam (56
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tonne
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tonnes
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) and Zambia (53
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tonne
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tonnes
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).
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,
in
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Bangladesh
consumption
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 had the highest number of
rice
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 with 58
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tonne
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tonnes
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,
while
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the
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rice
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production
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 with 53
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tonne
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, rice, tonne with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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