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The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar graph and table depict the number of exports in typical categories (petroleum
products
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, engineered goods, gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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, agricultural
products
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, and textiles) during the
period
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 from 2015 to 2016, and the table shows the proportion change in values during the same
period
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.
Overall
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, textiles and engineering
products
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 experienced extremely positive changes, followed by petroleum and agricultural goods, respectively.
Whereas
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, gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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 received a drop. At the starting
period
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, petroleum had the highest number of income at around just over 60
million
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,
then
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 faced a small growth to around 63
million
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 (3%) by 2016.
Followed by
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this
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, the number of engineered goods sold, which was around 57
million
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,
then
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 jumped to just over 61
million
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 (8.5%) by 2016.
Next,
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gems and
jewelry
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jewellery
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, which was the only category that fell, started at around 43
million
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 and dropped significantly to around 40
million
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 (-5.18%).
Next,
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agricultural
products
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 rose marginally by only 0.81% during the researched
period
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 at around 32
million
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. The
last
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 category, textiles, was the most increased product, with a growth of around 15.24% from 26
million
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 in 2015 to just above 30
million
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 in 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, ".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products, period, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • categories
  • percentage change
  • value
  • machinery
  • textiles
  • agricultural products
  • raw materials
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • sector
  • growth
  • decline
  • economic factors
  • market demand
  • trade policies
  • contribution
  • anomalies
  • unexpected findings
  • implications
  • economy
  • trade negotiations
  • export strategies
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