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The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ASSEM

The graph below shows the number of international graduates from UK universities in 2000 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. ASSEM
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The graph shows the
numbers
Fix the agreement mistake
number
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 of International graduates from UK
universities
Use synonyms
 from 2000 to 2015.
Overall
Linking Words
 London,Cambridge and Oxford
was increasing
Wrong verb form
increased
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in
Change preposition
between
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 2000 and 2015.
In addition
Linking Words
 Bristol, Bath,
Cardiff
Correct word choice
and Cardiff
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was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 increasing but not so how
they
Correct your spelling
the
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universities
Use synonyms
. In 2000, London was less than
others
Correct quantifier usage
other
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 international
universities
Use synonyms
. So in
2015
Add a comma
2015,
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this
Linking Words
 university increased
15
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by 15
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percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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.
Moreover
Linking Words
, Bristol and Bath
was
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were
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 like London .
However
Linking Words
, Bristol and Bath increased had
same
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the same
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 amount of numbers about 8-15
percentage
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per cent
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.
In addition
Linking Words
, in 2015 Oxford and Cambridge
universities
Use synonyms
 grow
about
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by about
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of
Change preposition
apply
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15-20
percentage
Replace the word
per cent
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.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, people were more
to
Correct word choice
likely to
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 enter Oxford
international university
Correct your spelling
International University
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words universities with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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