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The following charts show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in two years. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010

The following charts show the percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in two years. Report the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of electricity production by fuel source in France in 1990 and 2010
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The pie chart illustrates the
percent
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per cent
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 of electricity
prouduced
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produced
 by fuel
source
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sources
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 in
France
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 in
span
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the span
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 of 2 years.
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, it can be seen that in two years the most
in demand
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in-demand
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products
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product
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 or source of electricity in
France
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 is the use of Nuclear
Power
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.
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, in 1990 there
is
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 an equal total of 28% of Coal
Production
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 and natural gas in
France
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.
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this
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,
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 is the oil
produce
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produced
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 in
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france
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France
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 with a total of 22% respectively.
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,
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 the lowest
production
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 in 1990 was the source of Natural
Power
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 with a total of 6%.
Secondly
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 ,in
year
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the year
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 2010
overall
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 it shows that
the
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Nuclear
power
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 ranks with the highest
production
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 with a total of 67%.Next is the
production
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 of Coal and Oil with a total of
apporximately
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approximately
 13 %,
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,
Hydro
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Hydropower
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power
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 still ranks at its lowest at 2% of total electricity
production
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 in 2010.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, power, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • electricity production
  • fuel source
  • nuclear power
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • coal
  • natural gas
  • oil
  • hydroelectric power
  • solar energy
  • wind energy
  • biomass
  • comparison
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant change
  • trend
  • distribution
  • energy mix
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