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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given chart shows how the
export
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 earnings in different categories changed during 2015 and 2016. The table gives information about the proportion
change
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 in various values in 2016 in comparison to 2015.
Overall
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, the most significant fact to emerge from the chart is that the highest amount of the earnings was in the
export
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 of petroleum products and engineered goods,
while
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 textiles experienced the lowest income. Moving to a detailed analysis of
chart
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the chart
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 and table, the
export
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earning
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earnings
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 of petroleum products
was
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were
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 approximately 60 and 63
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 and 2016, respectively.
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, the percentage
change
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 in
this
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 value increased
3
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by 3
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% gradually.
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, the
export
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 of engineered goods indicates upward movement. It
climbs
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climbed
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 from 56
billion
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dollars
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 in 2015 to 62
billion
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dollars
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 in 2016. The percentage
change
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 in
this
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 value
rised
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rose
raised
rise
 8.5% steadily. Detailed analysis presents that, only the sale of gems and jewellery indicates a downward reduction. The percentage
change
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 in
this
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 figure is 5.18%. It can be said that the
sale
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sales
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 income of agricultural products remains stable,
shows
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showing
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 little
change
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 - 0.81% over a period. The
export
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 earnings of
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 value is about 32%
billion
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dollars
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words export, change, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "indicates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export value
  • economic sector
  • percentage change
  • increment
  • decrement
  • fluctuation
  • trend analysis
  • year-on-year comparison
  • significant growth/decline
  • stagnation
  • market dynamics
  • fiscal repercussions
  • trade balance
  • competitive advantage
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