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The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermakets and restaurants. Korkem.

The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermakets and restaurants. Korkem.
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The picture illustrates the development of
field
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the field
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 from
past
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the past
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 to nowadays.
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 there were dramatic changes to the construction and the conveniences of
this
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 territory district
was
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were
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 updated largely, noticing significant improvements to its residential accommodation, and its financial and
entertaining
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entertainment
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 were complicated. The most astonishing transformation is to the farmland and forest park which
located
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is located
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at
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on
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 the east side of
neighbourhood
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the neighbourhood
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 . Farmland was involved with
forest
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a forest
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 park to make
place
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a place
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 for a golf area and tennis courts to current. Another major change is the abstraction of
fishing
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the fishing
a fishing
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port
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ports
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. Living quarters had more importance at present. Some mansions were built for locals in the west. As well the destruction of
fish
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the fish
a fish
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 market which
sited
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was sited
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 near the sea made
area
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an area
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 for flats along the sea.
And shops
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Shops
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 that disposed opposite
of
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apply
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the apartments declined and made room for restaurants.
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, the hotel’s car park was mounted
beside
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beside it
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.
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Lastly
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 the cafe stood unchanged at the bottom corner of the western

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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