THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

THE BAR CHART BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE NUMBER OF STUDENTS STUDYING COMPUTER SCIENCE AT A UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the info by selecting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
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dynamic bar graph depicts how many
entrance
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entrances
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studying PC
skill
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skills
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at a UK university between 2012 and 2012. It is clear from the graph that the graph demonstrates a comparison between
house
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the house
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and International entrance for
a
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apply
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two genders who studied PC
system
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systems
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at a UK university between 2010 and 2012.
According to
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what is shown, we can see that female dormitory
students
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achieved a higher rate than male British home
students
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.
In contrast
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, International female entrance had a lower rate of numbers than International male
students
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.
Furthermore
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, the year 2012 had the highest number of
students
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studying computer science for both genders and for both home and international recruitment.
To sum up
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we could say obviously that British home
students
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had the higher rate of numbers of
students
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studying computer science between 2010 and 2012 for both genders.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • breakdown
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
  • spike
  • drop
  • percentage change
  • overall
  • noteworthy
  • observations
  • main features
  • comparison
  • relevant
  • highlight
  • significant
  • summarize
  • gender analysis
  • male students
  • female students
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