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Which of the following do you think is the best way to stay in good health? - Participating in group sports - Learning how to cook healthy meals - Joining a gym and following a strict exercise routine

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Individuals
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 are given multiple choices to keep fit nowadays,
such
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 as doing
workout
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workouts
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 with peers and friends, following specific meal plans, or seeking professional training through gyms.
People
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 have been
argue
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 about the most effective way for
individuals
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 to practice to stay healthy. In my opinion, I think participating in
group
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sports
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overweights
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outweighs
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 the other two options as it is more motivating and easy to start.
Firstly
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,
individuals
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 tend to be more motivated when
their
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they
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 are exercising with
others
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. In
group
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sports
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,
people
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 can easily form
connects
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 and build friendships with their teammates,
as a result
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, the encouragement from their friends
contribute
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contributes
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 significantly
in
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 completing the task.
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, the feedbacks and suggestions from
the
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apply
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others
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 are helpful in improving
individuals
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' actions and movements,
therefore
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, they feel more confident when
practicing
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practising
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 with
others
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. A study completed by a university indicated that 50% of
people
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 prefer doing workouts with
others
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.
Secondly
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,
group
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sports
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 are far more
accessiable
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accessible
. Different from working on building muscles in
the
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apply
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gyms,
people
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 are given unlimited choices when organizing
group
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sports
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 since they are not restrained by time or location. Many
sports
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,
such
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 as playing basketball or running can be done in the park or other free places.
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, it is
commonly
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common
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 to see Chinese citizens do square
dance
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dances
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 in different parks in the
summer time
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summertime
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. In conclusion, I believe joining
group
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 activities is the best way for
individual
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an individual
the individual
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 to remain healthy.
People
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 are more motivated and it is
accessiable
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accessible
 for the majority.

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Grammar
Ensure subject-verb agreement throughout the essay. For example, 'there are exercising with others' should be corrected to 'they are exercising with others.'
Vocabulary
Clarify 'overweights' in the introduction, as it is not commonly used in this context; 'outweighs' might be more appropriate.
Content
Make sure to support your main points with specific examples and elaborations for greater clarity.
Content
The essay presents a clear opinion on the best method for maintaining health, which is important for task achievement.
Structure
The structure is logical with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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