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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart illustrates data about
persent
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per cent
 of
household owned
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household-owned
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 and rented
accommodation
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in
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from
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 1918 to 2011 in different areas.
Overall
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, it's clear that in the
begining
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beginning
 household in rented
accommodation
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has
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have
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 the dominant
persents
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presents
presence
, but in the end, it's
the
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apply
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subordinate. In the end
households
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 in rented
accommodation
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has
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have
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 the superior percentage. 
Moreover
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, in the middle of the chart they are the same. Looking at the information in more
details
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detail
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, we can notice that in 1918,
Households
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 in rented
accommodation
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 is the peak around 75%, but in 2001
household
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households
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 in owned
accommodation
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is
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were
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 the highest less than 70%.
Furthermore
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, in 1971, both of these rates
have
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had
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 the same score
about
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of about
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 50%. In 1918,
households
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 in owned
accommodation
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are
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were
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 the lowest more than 20%.
In contrast
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, in 2001,
Households
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 in rented
accommodation
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are
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were
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 the inferior roughly 30%.
Also
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,
1918
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from 1918
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 to 2011, both of these rates
have
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apply
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fluctuation.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words accommodation, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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