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ou should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You want to join a new gym in your neighbourhood. Write a letter to the gym manager. In your letter ask what types of membership are available, and what the prices are ask what activities are available ask what the joining procedure is You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to Inquire about becoming a member of your
Gym
Use synonyms
along with
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 some general questions.
Firstly
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, I was wondering what kind of membership
do
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apply
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you offer and how they are different
?
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.
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For example
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 are there various types of equipment usage
opens
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open
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 up with different Plans or
there are
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do
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 other amenities like Sauna or massage chairs usage
comes
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come
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 with different plans
Secondly
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, I
also
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 want to know
that
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apply
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what kind of other activities your
Gym
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 offers
Besides
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 the
Gym
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 membership which is Usually provided
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for
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equipment use.
For
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instance
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instance,
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 some of the Gyms in
city
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the city
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 offer personal training sessions and Zumba classes as well. I would really
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appreciate
appriciate
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appreciate
 it If you could provide me with a personal Trainer and I can pay any additional fees associated with it Apart from that, Please write
me
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to me
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the
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about the
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 entire procedure of How to become a Member of your
Gym
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 and if you would require any
Indentifications
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Identification
 to complete the process. I am looking
farward
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forward
 to hearing from you. Best Regards. Gurlal

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coherence and cohesion
Consider separating your inquiries into different paragraphs to improve clarity. This can help the reader understand your questions more easily.
task achievement
Be sure to check for spelling errors, like 'Inquire' (which should be 'inquire') and 'appreciate' (misspelled). This affects clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
You effectively covered all the required points in your letter, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.
task achievement
The letter maintains a polite and respectful tone, which is appropriate for formal correspondence.
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