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The chart below shows the value of one’s country exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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 provide key information about purchases of some classes in a country in two years 2015-2016. The units are measured in percentages.
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, it is clear from the graph that all the types experienced a rise in 2016 compared with 2015 except gems and jewellery.
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, petroleum products
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 the top in
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both years,
whereas
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 textiles
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in
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the
last
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.
According to
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 what is shown, Petroleum showed an increase
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 3
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 in
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 value with sales reached to almost 62
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billions
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 in 2016. When it
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 60
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billions
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. Engineering goods provided a
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 rise in costs to 8.5% and approximately 61
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billions
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 in 2016.
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, gens and jewellery plunged significantly in 2016 compared to 2015. In terms of the rest categories,
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Agricultural
 showed a steady rise in the second year,
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 purchases were 31
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billions
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 in 2015 and almost 32 in 2016, and a small change in
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 value
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 0.81
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.
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, textiles jumped sharply
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 15.24% and had
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 32
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billions
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 compared with 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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