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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012
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The line graph represents the proportion of
Australian
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export
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exports
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with
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apply
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( Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and India) from 1990 to 2012.
Firstly
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, there were a number of
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of
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in
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Australian
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export
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exports
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such
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as
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in 1990,
the
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apply
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Australian
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export
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exports
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was
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were
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a
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the
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 most common in Japan around over 25 %
while
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China
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 was
a
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the
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 lowest one in
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the seam
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seam
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the
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 period.
Secondly
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, between 2005 to 2012,
China
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 registered
a
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the
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 largest percentage of
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export
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exports
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.
Finally
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, the US and India
fluctuate
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 slowly
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in Australia
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Australia
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Australia's
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 exports
among
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between
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 2005 and 2012. In conclusion, through the period
China
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shown
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an upward percentage of
Australian
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export
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exports
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,
while
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 India experienced a downward trend.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, export, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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