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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian export with four countries. The graph below shows the percentage of Australian exports to 4 countries from 1990 to 2012

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The line chart illustrates the
Australian
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exports
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export
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 rates in four countries
such
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 as
Japan
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,
US
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,
China
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, and India over a period of 22 years (from 1990 to 2012). There are two countries that experienced
downward
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a downward
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 trend, which are
Japan
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 and
US
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the US
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. In the year 1990,
Japan
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 had the highest
number
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 of
austalian
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Australian
export
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exports
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.
Japan
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 experienced a significant fall from around 26 per
cent
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 in 1990 to 17 per
cent
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 in 2010
,
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 and remained plateau until 2012. It
also
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 showed that in
US
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 the percentage was just over 10
percent
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in
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 the start
then
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 dipping to around 7 per
cent
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. Uptake rose slightly by 2000 and declined significantly to 2010, ending with around 7 per
cent
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.
Conversely
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, the rates of
Australian
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exports
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 in
China
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was
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were
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 almost the lowest
in
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at
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 the start,
however
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, the percentage of
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australian
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exports
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 increased. In the middle of 2005 and 2010,
China
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has
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 the highest
number
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 of
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australian
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exports
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, in 2012 it reached the peak to a high of almost 29 per
cent
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. The
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number of australian
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australian
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Australian
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exports
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number
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 in
india
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India
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 stayed the same from the beginning until the year 2000
with
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at
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 around 1 per
cent
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,
then
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 it
experience
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experienced
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upward
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an upward
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 trend and
increase
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increased
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 gradually
about
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 7 per
cent
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, the
number
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were
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 approximately 2 per
cent
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 higher than those in
US
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the US
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 and
drop
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dropped
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 slightly to 5
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
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, in 1990 the
number
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 of
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australian
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Australian
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exports
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 in
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japan
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Japan
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wa s
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was
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 the highest,
nonetheless
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in
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at
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 the end
China
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outnumbering
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outnumbered
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 all other
the
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apply
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countries. Meanwhile,
india
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India
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 was the lowest in the
beggining
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beginning
 and the end.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, exports, japan, china, number, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Line graph
  • Percentage
  • Exports
  • Trend analysis
  • Upward/downward trend
  • Fluctuation
  • Comparison
  • Peak performance
  • Decline
  • Stability
  • Significant
  • Inferred
  • Global events
  • Economic context
  • Reflect
  • Influence
  • Patterns
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