Last week, you celebrated your birthday with some friends in a restaurant. It was a great success and you and your friends enjoyed yourselves very much. Write a letter to the restaurant. In your letter mention the food and service explain that you really enjoyed the atmosphere suggest any improvements to make things better You should You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am Santhoshkumar and celebrated my birthday party at your restaurant with my friends
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week. I am writing
this
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letter to express my gratitude and appreciation for your cuisines and services. My friends and I really enjoyed the food varieties
especially
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the Chinese shrimp dishes.
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, I would like to appreciate the
staffs
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for their polite nature and quick
services
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without delay. They arranged everything before the party and
leaving
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no work for us. I would like you to suggest
few
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improvements which will improve your restaurant
further
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in future. The environment is great but with increasing air conditioners people will feel much more cool because of the hot weather.
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, the toilets should be cleaned at regular intervals since many people are visiting your restaurant
in
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weekends. Once again, I really appreciate your
foods
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and services with all my heart. Yours sincerely, Santhoshkumar

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General Improvement
Consider using more varied vocabulary to enhance the richness of your writing.
Task Achievement
Make sure the suggestions for improvements are presented more clearly and concisely.
Positive Tone
You successfully conveyed your gratitude and appreciation, which contributes to a positive tone in your letter.
Logical Structure
The structure of your letter is clear with distinct paragraphs that address different points.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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